Good morning or good afternoon!
For today's post I am going to show you a story that some classmates and I have writen.
This story is called Menlor's Thoughts and it is a romantic and adventure story.
With this story we have won an award for the best villian and hereo story.
I hope you can enjoy the story as we did writen it!
MENLOR'S THOUGHTS
I’m running, it is real. I can feel the air against my body over the field, near the grey and dark clouds...pum pum, pum pum, I can hear my heart beating, faster and faster. The contrast between the cold of the gun and my finger’s heat, is killing me. Although it is dark my heart is still looking for the light.
My name is Alex and I am 19 years old, I live in a village and I’ve survived and I am alive, yes I am alive.
I am not a slave, I am a fighter.
I won’t be quiet although I have to, I still have a voice and they are going to listen it!
This is my story, and you are ready to know it.
I should have been born on the 28th of April, but I was born on the 8th of April.
I always thought that there was a problem with my birth date. However, in the city problems do not exist, here we have to be the ideal human and we have to fight against the human evil thoughts. Our supreme captain is called Jake, before he came to power my mother was the leader and she organized what nowadays is Menlor.
Menlor is the only safe city around the world nowadays. We are in 2088 and the third world war started 2 years before. Menlor inhabitants are soldiers , but we don’t fight if it is not completely necessary.
Yes, now I am a soldier. But I don’t have the M on my shoulder as the other soldiers and this is my secret although I don’t know why.
Here there is a wall, and to access the city you have to pass an important exam, you have to be physically and emotionally prepared , but if you are a stranger you cannot be an official soldier, you just can help Menlor society, working as a farmer .
After 15 years of my mother having the power, Jake appeared. She died 2 years after. Before dying she gave me a gun and she told: “My little fighter, this gun will save your live, keep it and protect it. One day you will understand why”. That was an important gift because when she gave me that gun I looked at her eyes and I knew that I had to put it aside,She died holding my hand and smiling, at that time I was seventeen and I could be an official soldier.
And then it happened, I discovered the secret.
It was a dark night, and I was running to go to my bed, because soldiers are grouped in army base rooms. I was going to the bathroom when Jake pick me, I was shocked, I had never been face to face with him, the only thing he told me was “Come in, we have to talk”.
He closed the door then after I came in.The room was quite big, I expected a different space, like more luxurious than what I saw.
Jack sat down in his blue chair and he stared me, first of all, he looked to my hands and then looked to my brown eyes , and he told me.
-Your eyes are exactly the same as your mother’s ones.- he said.
And I started crying.
After 5 minutes without saying nothing he started again. I thought that he was going to hand over a new mission to me, but his voice tone was different, it was cooler. He stood up and he went to lock the door. He started laughing at me because he knew me so good, he knew that I was scared about what could happen next. Jack seems warm but he is the coldest person I have ever known, he gave to me a new mission, he told me it was extraoficial and top secret.
Next morning I got up and I was ready to start investigating about it, at the beginning it seemed difficult but after some weeks the investigation was improving so fast.
The last day of the mission I found a suspicious floor that was closed because it might have been the rebel’s secret den, I was exhausted because I have found what in years nobody could.
Well that is what I thought.
I was leaving when I recognised the blue T-shirt of my mother.
I walked toward the piece of cloth and I smelt it.
Then everything was clear, some photos and memories came to my mind in a few seconds.The pictures and thoughts that came to my mind were about 10 years ago, I was with my mother lying in the bed when some gun shots sounded in Menlor, and she yelled “the rebels have arrived honey”and now I could remember , she yelled with a bid and warm smile on her lips.
They have lied us.
My mother was a rebel. But, why didn't I know that before?
After this, I realized that Menlor’s inhabitants were fighting against the wrong side.
I could not live in this lie, I can’t, some tiers started falling down my cheeks , at the beginning shinily but then they fell down strongly.
“I have to get away, I have to go to the forest ,right now”.
There was a huge and overgrown forest surrounding Menlor and I was going toward it,even though it was forbidden.
I’m running, it is real I can feel the air against my body over the field, near the grey and dark clouds...pum pum, pum pum, I can hear my heart beating, faster and faster. I look behind me because i think that someone is pursuing me, then I notice anything under my feet, and I fall down and I thought: The REBELS*.
I get up as faster as my body let me and I look around me, I was in a kind of cell, strange and frightening, and it happens again, more photos and memories come to my mind.
“I was in a type of bathtub but thinner and my mother was holding my hand and saying that everything is gonna be alright, I was five or six years because I was still having an M on my right shoulder but while the water was traveling my body, the M erased, after this day, my mother did not let me wear short-sleeves clothes”.
Suddenly I hear someone entering to my cell and he switches on the light,he is aiming me and I cannot stop looking to his brown eyes, now he is asking me annoying questions and I’ve decided not to answer any question. He notices it and he tells me that if I am not going to speak, he is going to kill me right there. I don’t know what to do i cannot say the truth , what about if he is a soldier? Then I faint.
I don’t know for how much time I have been unconscious, probably more than twelve hours because I can see the sun through the small window so I decide not to spent more my time and I start speaking aloud. With a little luck someone is going to come here to explain why I am here.I have to fight, I must do it for all of my village. I have to do it for my mother.
After five minutes yelling nobody comes. A strong anger takes the control of my mind and I start punching the gun against the cell wall with my gun. All of sudden a letter falls down, the letter was hidden in the gun grip.
The letter said:
My little fighter,Alex.if you have used this gun probably is because you have discovered the truth.Menlor’s inhabitants since they born they have in mind an objective.After some weeks a kid is born they inject him/her an inoculation that don’t allow her/him to question anything , in conclusion they cannot opine by themselves.
And I am sorry because I was one of the leaders who think that this would be successful, and it was until Jake appeared, if you have your village’s opinion controlled all is gonna be easier for the power, at the beginning the leaders only wanted to protect them but then the power made us turn mad and when I realized it, it was too late.
Now Jake is producing all kinds of weapons, and he is selling them to the small villages around Menlor, for a bad reason, he wants that all the villages fight against each others to enter to the city with the aim of being safe and being out of the violence and war, but the village’s inhabitants don’t know that Jake won’t open the doors of Menlor. He wants to kill everybody out of Menlor, he wants the power.
You my baby , you are different, since you were a kid I want you to be free and to be able to think for yourself , so I decided to remove the inoculation with the bathtub.
I wanted to do the best for my village.
With love, Mommy.
-I can’t believe it!- Suddenly he appears behind me and tell me-
-What can’t you believe?- The boy says.
Then I start explaining all to him, because now, I know where is my place. My place is with the rebels.
He stands up and he throws off my handcuffs and then we way ahead to the communitarian zone, where he shouts to the rest of the rebels the truth that I have said to him :
-Everybody must take their weapons, tomorrow is the day, finally we know who are we fighting against.
-By the way, i’m Jordan but my friends call me Jor.- He tells me
-I’m Alex- I say while we are shaking hands.
- You must be tired, what about if we search a bed for you. Here we don’t have too much luxuries- He says.
- Don’t worry- I interrupt him.
We walked towards a room with a little bed and a picture of a little boy and his mum.
-This is my room, there is only one bed but don’t worry I’ll sleep on the ground.- He says naturally.
We lay down on our “beds” and we fall asleep.
I get up because of a nightmare and I look at him, he is shuddering. I touch his back to wake him up, he wakes up and I ask him if he wants to sleep with me and he accepts.After this I can’t sleep more and he can’t too so we start talking.At the beginning just explaining funny stories but then he asks me with a friendly voice while he is touching my hair:
-what is your worst fear?
-I don’t know, a lot of things scare me probably my main fear is not being enough, and yours?
-I think is strange my fear, because my fear is to love someone.-He answers-
-But why?-I ask confused-
-It is easy, if you really love someone, if you fall in love, you become weak because you love more the other person than yourself -He answers honestly-
-Good night Jor.
-Good night Alex.
And he places his arm around me and we fall asleep
The sun wake us up, and I notice his hands on my waist , immediately I get redden. And finally I wake him up and we are ready to leave.
We start walking, it’s a long journey left. We are prepared for the fight .Although they are many more,we won’t give up.
We walk for three hours but it seems more. Suddenly appears a reindeer, we stop, and then we hear a shotgun.
-Get down!- someone shout. The reindeer runs out and we see a hunter group.
-All, hide! Now! In silence!- I say. We wait some minutes.
Dani: -They don’t leave.
-I know, and they are not a hunter group. I think they were waiting for us.
-And now?
-We are going to…- I couldn't finish what I was saying because one of the “hunter” shoot to me.
-Are you ok?- Jor yelled
-Well, yes. Thankfully they have bad aim.- I laugh.
-Oh! Look at your shoulder!
-I’m ok, don’t worry.It has been a clean shot for me
-Sure?
-Yes
-Ok. One second, don’t move.- He tears a piece of his shirt.- It will hurt you - he says.I assent
- Hug!
-Ok, it’s done
-Thanks Jor- I look at him, his brown eyes, his perfect lips, his perfect face…
-I help you lift?
-Oh, yes- I get up with his help. - Guys, let’s see what do you know
-Yes, let’s fight!!
First it hurts, but now I’m fighting and I don’t know why, well I think that is thanks to the adrenalin, but my shoulder is better than ever.
-Uff! Thanks god that it finished.
-Jaja, this was only a warming.
When we are walking and talking i hear something that scared me, I don’t hear nothing, I turn backward, Jor wasn’t there. I should have thought that who was pursuing me at the beginning was a Jake’s soldier. Finally we are here in front of the Menlor’s door, and as I am an official soldier I can open the door but instantly some gases appear and all of us fall down.
I become conscious and I wake up another time in a cell. This time I know in which cell I am. I know it because I took some prisoners here when I was an official soldier. It may help me because I know almost everything of my town, including the prison. As the doors are electrical, they don’t use keys, so I can’t steal them. But there is an emergency button in case of a problem. I’m lucky because these cells are thought for strong men with wide arms, not for thin arms. I’ll try to pass my arm between two bars and push the button. I try it with all my strength, I’m just 1 centimeter from the button. I can’t push it.
I have to think of a solution, I can be here all my life! Then I get it, I have the solution although it will be very painful for me. I have to dislocate my shoulder, with these little centimeters I’ll be able to push it.
I’ve decided to dislocate my injured arm. So I’m ready to do it. One, two, …. three!
-Aaaaah! Oh my god - I shouted. I’m going to take two minutes to take a breath.
The two minutes are past. With the good arm I move the other, I put it between the bars and I push the button! The door opens and I can get out of here. I start running.
Suddenly someone shouts my name.
-Alex, Aleeeex!
When I hear it I recognise the voice of Jor. He is laying on the ground and something catches my attention.Oh no his arm! Jake has put him the inoculation and he has the M. I take him out of the cell pushing the emergency button. I have to do something to save him, I have to do something to recover his mental freedom!
Perfect! I know what to do! I’ll take him to the bathtub. Now I only have to remember where did my mum hide it.
I try to remember the flashback I had. I can see that there is a lot of light, white walls, a brown door and …. and a picture of me and my grandmother! I know where is it. It’s in my grandmother’s house!! We have to go to the oldest part of the city to find it.
-Alex- Jor says
-I’m thinking, wait a moment- I answer him.
-Alex, I think we have a problem- He repeats
- You should listen your friend Alex- Jake says
Oh no. It can’t be happening. Jake has found us.
Jake jumps over me but luckily I’m faster than him and I can avoid him. I’m not as strong as him but I’m more intelligent. I avoid a hook and a punch. He has destabilised, now it’s my chance. I hit him in the throat, now he can’t breathe normally, then I hit him in the abdomen and he falls down. While he is in the ground I hit him in the ribs. He is very injured and I am tired, but I haven’t finished yet. I catch him with my good arm for the neck and I squeeze it with all my strength. I can see the fair in his eyes, I can notice how the life is leaving his body. Before he dies I tell him:“Would you imagine dying in this way? Could you imagine dying as my mother did?It is funny,so funny, I am killing you like you killed my mother! But then I stop and I let him breath.
-Oh, poor Alex, you are so stupid and weak, weak as you mother!-He tells me gossiping-
When I am listening this I can feel how my fury increases and my hands go directly to his neck and I squeeze his neck until he died.
A part of me died too.
When he stops breathing I lay him on the ground.
I can’t cry I feel empty.
But we have to go to my grandmother’s house, Jor has his mind controlled and I have to do something before they use his power to controlate him.Every minute is important I take his hand and we start running, running until we are in the house.Now I have to discover where the bathtub is hidden and while I was thinking, Jor hit me in my shoulder, the one that was injured by the gun shoot, and he starts squeezing me and I can’t do nothing he is stronger and taller than me so the only thing that I can do is breath,and cry now I can cry and my sight is getting slowly darker and darker but then I realize that I am not feeling pain,so it is another flashback.
I stand up in my grandmother’s room I look around and I find it, I find the bathtub and I say what Jor has to do then he follows all my steps and in two minutes under the water the letter M disappears.
Jor gets off the bathtub but someone is behind him, I can’t say nothing my voice is broken the official soldier that is aiming me shoots me with a gun and the bullet collides me and I fall down because of the impact. I am with the eyes opened and I can see how Jor kills the official soldier and how he runs until he holds me and carries me to a bed. While he is trying to think a solution he starts asking me some questions , stupid questions to make me stay with the eyes opened. After some minutes I start crying and I say him that he is brave and a good person,he gets closer to me and he whispers me”I love you Alex” then I smile to him but he presses
his lips against mines, it was a slow kiss but full of emotions.
Then he starts looking at my chest, he is saying that there is no blood and after it he removes my gun from my chest, the gun has stopped the bullet, I am alive.
After two hours I have energy enough to stand up and look at Jor, Jor is in the street with the rest of the rebels.
When I meet with them in the street, everybody start yelling my name.
It is amazing to know that you have changed something.
We win, and it’s real.